Sample Answers - Animal Farm (Grades 9

Examiner's Grade

Grade 4 The examiner gave this sample answer Grade 4.
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Comment

There are some good points made here and a viewpoint comes across but the style is rather chatty and informal in places. The writer needs to refer more to Orwell himself and what he does, and there is little reference to language devices or techniques. There is one comment on context but it is fleeting.

For Grade 6

Use a more formal and critical vocabulary rather than chatty, informal words and phrases.
Embed quotations into sentences more fluently so that they flow and are easy to follow.
Comment in detail on the effect of language choices made by Orwell.