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A
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Comment
This is an outstanding response with few weak points. Quotations and evidence are woven skilfully into the answer, and there are several examples of original thinking and ideas. The response is slightly weaker in the second half with perhaps not enough reference to working life on the farm and Slim's place within it, but overall this is very successful.
For an A* grade
Greater analysis of ranch life in the second half of the essay, widening out to the specific context of America in the 1930s.
More developed, tighter conclusion with analysis of the quotation and renewed focus on the role of Slim.
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