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Lower
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The answer provides some description of the way the excitement is created in the extract. A range of points are made and supported by quotations. However, the analysis is very basic in places and the vocabulary is repetitive.
For a Mid Level Response
- Identify the techniques used and analyse the language in the quotes used.
- Make specific reference to other sections of the novella.
- Explore the writer’s intention by using the phrase ‘Conan Doyle presents/portrays ...’.
- Use a more professional and varied range of literary terms and vocabulary.
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